|Save your breath|
Lana Del Rey - Born To Die
SPECIAL feature : Halloween MiniContest
*sorry for the late reply I just have free time at night so is been hard to have hand in everything at the same time.
Keys: CREATIVITY SIMPLICITY EMOTION
there the speicl feature! Each one have a small comentary in their entry and 3 works featured!
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"The wild Ghosts come out tonight!"
This one was really simple and expressive at the same time, Small but with much to say. Putting the phrase with “!” give us a different emotion like if it was an advertising. I felt like someone would scream in the middle of the night that .
Luciana's LamentI feel only you,
I see only you,
I hear only you.
As the darkness creeps around me,
It threatens to suffocate.
Never enough to just take my innocence,
You turned me into something
I never wanted to know.
For all the things you've done, for your own greed,
Never once thought about your own child
Fragile as a porcelain doll,
now broken once more.
I dream about a world,
where I am free again.
It was never my fault.
I can still taste the blood
Of the many innocent souls,
It shouldn't have ever been like this.
Will I ever be pure once more?
I cry from the pain you put me through.
I cry as I carry the weight of the world on my shoulders.
It never should have been this way,
And it was all because of you.
"The whispers sounded within her mind, wrapping around her brain, haunting her. What she didn´t want to admit is that she liked them… "
Mirz-Alt decided to create a moment around a virtual character. I felt completely inside of it! The way you wrote all the sequences in the 3rd person give us suspense. The order of the verbs “Sounded”, “wrapping” and “haunting” give us a strong feeling of anxiety, almost like if we were living that intensely a looking for the next action. The second moment is like a paradox or a game between a scary and liking emotion.
Why?As I sit and ponder,
I wonder why
the joy of a kiss melts
to the pain of a cry.
I wonder why happiness
is merely a dream
While misery is as
real as it seems.
I wonder of darkness
that engulfs the night.
The caring between lovers
who continually fight.
I wonder of purging
the soul with tears
Yet carrying the hurt within
throughout the years.
I wonder of a child's birth
into this life
How it ends in a coffin
after pain, stress and strife.
I wonder why some things
are doomed from the start
but nevertheless end up
breaking your heart.
I wonder why the agony
that dwells within
Burns like the fire
of original sin.
Is there a reason
to go on, I dare ask.
Terrified of the future
running away from the past.
So many questions
I so often wonder why
But there are no real answers
Only exasperated sighs.
"Tonight is the night that the whispers of wild ghosts are heard in the rustling of fallen leaves and in the scurrying in the shadows."
SparkleDest give us a mysterious and strong detailed feeling while describes all the “objects” in the scene. A really rich and delicate moment you offered us. “…Heard in the rustling of fallen leaves” shows how deep she tried to make us walk into it!
"Tonight is when the wild ghosts wander through your memory, the whispers of lovers past clinging to your ears. "
A scary and intense moment; The direction that you tried to make us feeling of lovers past and wild ghost was really good. When I read I felt like it was that moments of our lives that we have our mind thinking in the deep of the past and would be like a “parasite” in our ears, like if we couldn´t scape from them.
Seeking SolaceI rest below the windowsill,
Hearing only the pitter-patter of rain,
The lonesome teardrops come to me,
As emblems of my pain.
My tear stained cheeks are permanent,
Having come so often and leaving scars,
Feeling as though no one understands,
And I am trapped within my own wars.
I wish to be alone,
Yet with someone I want to stay,
My desires confuse me deeply,
So within my thoughts I will continue to pray.
Its raining outside in my world,
But behind the window is shine,
The drops are only brought on by tears,
And forever they will be from mine.
Now here comes a dash of light,
Someone approaching me,
Its clear Im seeking solace,
But I wish theyd let me be.
"Tonight is the darkest night of the year, when the blanket between the powers of good and evil is the thinnest. Evil spirits roam the streets, leaking into every house and every child, turning your worst nightmares into an apocalyptic reality. "
While I was reading all the moments I felt like it was really apocalypse moment. The intensity you give using “darkest” was really good because i could reach the emotion of the atmosphere that you tried to describe. When you said “every house and every child” make things clear that everyone will be a victim of that night.
"The whispers of the wild ghosts were crowding in her mind, transforming her into a horrific monster, slowly but surely. Tonight is the night were the formation of mental objects take control."
This one had a strong emotion while you tried to turn reality mental objects using the connection of wild ghosts with mind. It was really interesting thinking how our ghosts can control us.
· In other hand, I’m working already in the last prize so I will be able to share with all of you soon, and I will post some personal sketch/works I had in my machine that were waiting to be finished
· The tutorial-BRUSH, part2 will be release next too
· I’m thinking on open slots for point commissions what you think? Would you be interested?!?